Hello!
I was a bit bummed by what the generator offered today, so sat and thought about all the different meanings of ‘present’, ‘statement’ and ‘event’ – then managed to come up with a wee story that
meshed together ok in my remaining minutes.
I actually wrote the first verse and then realised that ‘colorful’ (*again, spelt the UK way in the poem) and ‘unpack’ were set up nicely once I got to them.
Go me! 😉
Subsequent Present Second-hand Afternoon Statement Productive Event Colourful* Unpack
“All subsequent words
Are not worth repeating”
She finished, staring down
At the present before her.
I was hearing the story
Second-hand, but still
It was charged with
Violent regret.
I felt for the protagonist:
Left standing in a police station
On what started as an ordinary afternoon
(Now damning prose and statement)
But it did not seem productive
To mull over and over
Such a harrowing event
(With hinted-at colourful language)
Instead, I reached over our coffee mugs,
Still steaming through our words,
Reminded my lady to open the box;
Hoping she’d unpack our shared future.
I used the word over too many times in the last two verses, and my lady kinda bugs me…but I am quite chuffed with what my time produced.
Which nuances, of which words, would you have used? How would your story have unfolded?
Chat to me about it in the comments 😉
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