Review – #NaPoWriMo23 – Day 24

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NaPoWriMo’s 24th prompt lead me towards a poem I didn’t expect to pop out of me today, but it felt cathartic <3

“Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem in the form of a review. But not a review of a book or a movie of a restaurant. Instead, I challenge you to write a poetic review of something that isn’t normally reviewed.” [from here]


*Trigger Warning: Suicide*

Ten out of ten for consequence,
Ensuring nothing made much sense;
For leaving everyone you knew
So struck with grief (but anger too).
Yes, your religion likes to say:
“You committed sin that day,
And though you’d nuances at play,
Your empty space makes others pay”.

You always struck me as such fun,
And a devoted friend and mum;
But circumstances truly sucked…
I hate you felt all out of luck.
Well done for all the friends you made,
So many people wish you’d stayed,
Your Facebook page I visit still,
I like to see your smile, at will.
Your children grieve you even now,
(I know you’re watching them somehow)
The state of mind that sealed the act
Did not explore all the impacts.

But, as I age, the more I see,
What grew in you’s also in me.
I make my choices every day
To stand in solidarity –
Rememb’ring we can never know
The full extent of what’s unshown;
Each person’s island is awash
With all their traumas, fears and loss.
(Some of us do a stellar job
Of plastering a smile – a fob)

I’m sorry I was one of those
Who saw your businesses and clothes
(And driving skill, organised home…)
Assumed you rarely felt alone.

You had a purpose, made your mark.

Now you’re a beacon in my dark.


Be back soon for Day 25 – last week of NaPo ’23! 


Monty X

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2 Responses to “Review – #NaPoWriMo23 – Day 24”

  1. Jennifer Patino Says:

    This is a beautiful tribute 💙

  2. Montaffera Says:

    Thank you 🤗 x

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