Hi 🙂
I learned today there are definitely pieces that I can’t write in 20 minutes!! Michelle’s idea was lovely (I actually teared up when I read it) but the complexities totally foxed me.
This was Michelle’s task:
Title: Misheard
Character: Adolescent boy with non-verbal autism
Form: Story
I went to YouTube first, as I had been procrastinating on there watching things about J. K. Rowling anyway (as one does). I tapped around this channel, then this one – for about ten minutes all in. It was then only about half an hour until I would have to go and pick up Youngest, so I just screwed up my courage and started writing.
The piece is meant to mostly happen in the character’s head, of course:
Mum, put the phone AWAY!
It needs to go away, loud words hurt my ears. I am going to take it away. I hate it! It sounds like the bad man. The bad man makes Mum cry.
I want the news on. I want the man with the clouds and sunshine, and the lady with the glasses on. The lady is kind. Smiles look good on her.
Mum has a wet face. My finger is wet. Mum can’t dry it.
“because I am too sad”
I am sad. My face is not wet. Mum is angry. I want a smile.
I can see the sun, it makes me happy. I want Mum to look at the sun. The sun is on her hair. She needs to LOOK. The sun will make her happy. I WANT her to LOOK!! Mum will not SEE.
The bad man is in the toilet. I can see his face talking.
Yes, it took me the full 20 minutes to write these 155 words. I was really struggling to figure out how to not make him sound like a toddler, but also use simpler phrases. Plus, I was confused about pronouns. Would he use them, if he could verbalise…does that mean he’d use them in his head??
Hubby didn’t really get what I was going for at the end of the piece when I read him it, and I ran out of time so wasn’t allowed to tweak! If I had had a few minutes extra, I would have scribbled the below:
The phone is wet.
The bad man has gone away now.
Does that help make the ending any clearer for you guys?!
I think I’ll chalk this one up to a wee learning experience, I don’t think I did particularly well here 😛
Well played Michelle, well played…!
Worse: I have no inspiration in the comments of the sticky post for tomorrow! Help me out, dear reader who has not played my latest lil game yet, please!
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