Alas – Day Twenty-One – #NaPoWriMo21

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Hi 😊

Hope you are all well? It is a glorious sunny day here, but I have entered spooky territory with today’s prompt:

Have you ever heard or read the nursery rhyme, “There was a man of double deed?” It’s quite creepy! A lot of its effectiveness can be traced back to how, after the first couplet, the lines all begin with the same two phrases (either “When the . . .” or “Twas like,”). The way that these phrases resolve gets more and more bizarre over the course of the poem, giving it a headlong, inevitable feeling.

Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that, like this one, uses lines that have a repetitive set-up. [from]

I kept thinking about Poe while writing my answer to the prompt, and all the associated ponderings and thoughts this gave way to helped me get the ending to come out in a rush 😉


Alas, she came to marry me.

Alas, the me she chose to see

Was (alas!) not worth her time.

Alas, I became naught but slime.

Alas, this slime it chose to stick,

Alas! This sticking made her sick;

Alas! This sickness cost her mind,

Alas! Her brain then chose to find

A sick, sticking place; dark and gruesome!

(A horrid, putrid, TOMB this twosome!)

A thorny bed, a sick-stuck head,

A MURDER, then, was committed…



So it really is a lovely day out there.

I’m off to get some lunch (!) take care of yourselves, and I’ll be baaaack 😉


Monty X


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